Help me with invitation wording

[cheese_diva]

What do you think of this wording? Not sure if I love it. Ignore the fact that some text is in caps, some small.

 

 

Because you have shared in our lives

With your friendship and love, we

 

 

Angela XXXXXX

and

Matthew XXXXX

 

 

Invite you to share in our happiness

As we become husband and wife

 

SUNDAY, the TWENTY-EIGHTH day of october

TWO THOUSAND and SEVEN

At FOUR O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

 

On the beach

 

DREAMS RESORT & SPA

CABO SAN LUCAS, MEXICO

 

A CELEBRATION WILL FOLLOW

IN HONOR OF LIFE, LOVE

AND THE PEOPLE WE CHERISH MOST

 

WE HOPE YOU WILL JOIN US

[cheese_diva]

R. S. V. P.

 

Join us in Paradise!

 

Kindly respond by the 28th of September

 

We have reserved ______ seat(s) in your honor

 

 

 

_________________________________

Name(s)

 

 

_____ is/are looking forward

to the fiesta, arriba!

 

_____ Has/Have to miss the fun

under the Mexican sun.

 

 

Please initial entrée choice for each guest

 

_____ Sea Bass in beurre blanc sauce

 

_____ Beef Tenderloin in red wine sauce

 

please share with us your arrival date and Accommodations

[dragonfly]

I like it, what about it are you not liking?

[CourtneyV]

Well, honestly. It's good. My uncle sent us invitations to his wedding this year that said pretty much exactly the same thing... but maybe that's my point. It's definately nice, but it's missing that zazz that can be added with a DW. Just my honest opinion. I wanted to try something that was a little different from all the other invitations people receive every summer. Especially if they're DIY, you might want to add a little beach flavour to it... IMO

[cheese_diva]

I'm not loving the "Because you have shared in our lives With your friendship and love, we" or the verse under our names.

 

I've looked at a zillion invites.. but can't quite figure out the wording.. I don't want it stiff, but not so loosey goosey either.. no ocean poems... although beautiful, we aren't really "beach" people.. funny since we're marrying on a beach.

[deleted]

I have see the "because you have shared in our lives..." beginning a lot recently. So, I like it, but it's no longer "original" if that is what you are going for. But if you don't care about that, then go for it!

 

Are you worried about people bringing kids or boyfriends or non-invited guests and that's why you have the "we reserved ____ spots for you"?

[CourtneyV]

Quote:

Originally Posted by JANET1111 I have see the "because you have shared in our lives..." beginning a lot recently. So, I like it, but it's no longer "original" if that is what you are going for. But if you don't care about that, then go for it!

That's what I meant, only you said it 50 times better!! lol

[cheese_diva]

what about?

 

In a tropical paradise surrounded by family and friends

 

Angela xxxxxx

and

Matthew xxxxx

 

 

INVITE YOU TO SHARE THE SUN, SEA

AND MEMORIES OF OUR WEDDING DAY

 

SUNDAY, the TWENTY-EIGHTH day of october

TWO THOUSAND and SEVEN

At FOUR O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

 

on the beach

 

DREAMS RESORT & SPA

CABO SAN LUCAS, MEXICO

 

A CELEBRATION WILL FOLLOW

IN HONOR OF LIFE, LOVE

AND THE PEOPLE WE CHERISH MOST

[cheese_diva]

Quote:

Originally Posted by JANET1111 Are you worried about people bringing kids or boyfriends or non-invited guests and that's why you have the "we reserved ____ spots for you"?

That was the original thought, but I think most people have booked and that would mean I have to open each invite and write a number... I think I'll remove.

[cheese_diva]

I just got my samples and I LOVE them!!! There was a slight confusion with the paper color.. my actual invites will be a tad more blue.. these are more of a blue green but I hope my guests are really impressed. I'll write a review as soon as my process is done...

 

I do need help with two more things.. On the main invite it says

 

Angela xxxx and Matthew xxxx

Invite you to share the sun, sea and memories of our wedding day

 

Shouldn't it say "their"? The designer says it won't fit because it makes the line too long and says it's ok because of the casual wording.. what do you think?

 

 

The RSVP is a postcard so that will help with postage.

 

 

 

I have a Wedding Weekend insert that lists our welcome dinner plans and the wedding/reception plans.. There is a day (Saturday) in between the two. I want to say something about enjoying their vacation on this day but not sure how to word it.. currently it says

 

Day of Leisure

Saturday, October 27th

Enjoy yourself next to the pool or under a palapa on the beach. Dresams Resort also has a spa that offers massages under the stars. The concierge will be able to help you make other recreationals plans should you choose to go into either Cabo San Lucas or Sand Jose Del Cabo.

 

It sounds chunky instead of fun. We don't wont to tell people what to do.. they are on vacation after all but it does fill up the page. Any ideas?

 

 

I didn't upload a picture of the best part!!! It comes in a light brown box with a leather band and large sand dollar around it. Here's a link to the designer's site:

Eiffel Printing & Design - 5x7 Tiffany Blue Marsupial with cane paper and sand dollars.